Thursday, October 11, 2007

What happens when you don't pay attention

In literature I've been learning about expressive poems, or poems that create moods. In my literature school book it said to read an expressive poem. I thought it said to write one. So I wrote this big long poem that's really dumb. Then I was reading the next assignment, and realized that I really didn't need to write it at all! It's an awful feeling, realizing that you have done more school than you needed to. I hate pretty much any school, and doing more than I need to (especially in literature) is just not the way I do it. Since then I have double checked what I need to do in school!

Warning: If you are any kind of a nice person at all you will stop reading right here. My mom is making me post my poem, even though I don't want to.

Walking, just walking
I'll never stop
not even after the sun is up.

Walking, just walking
I'm tired now,
but I can't stop now
I won't.

I see a river up ahead
I have to reach it soon.
A place where no fear or hurt can penetrate
I'll get there by nightfall at this rate.

But I can't go farther
I can't, I can't!
But I must
I must, I must!

Up ahead is rest, is shelter
but I'm tired
too tired.

I need to not feel.
I won't, I won't.

I have to keep walking,
walking, walking.
I look nowhere
but straight ahead.

It seems like forever
that I'll have to walk.

I can't stop
I have to keep walking,
walking,
walking.

12 comments:

My Ice Cream Diary said...

Eve, I was ready to read a cute poem by a kid. I was not expecting to read a poem that kept me totally engaged and left me thinking. That was beautifully and unpretentiously well done.

Sami said...

Great job Eve! I enjoyed your poem, even if you think it's stupid. I agree with you about doing more school work than you had to though. Never really my cup of tea either...

nestle said...

I guess I'm not a nice person. love ya.

aunt ness

nestle said...

OOOh and bytheway not nice of mom to make you publish your poem for the WHOLE WORLD TO SEE. :-D

I guess niceness doesn't run in the family

wild murdocks said...

I'm sorry to say that I'm quite evil as well, I skipped right over the warning and eagerly read the poem--I love poetry! great job!

Calandria said...

Haha! I bet your mom wasn't sad you did extra school. I don't think she said, "Darn. My daughter just wrote a poem and she didn't even HAVE to." :-)

Good poem, by the way. I like it!

Jia said...

I'm shocked that you wrote that poem! I mean truly. It's beautiful and insightful and you should not be embarassed by it. I think you've got a good chance at getting it in an article or book if you found the right place to submitt it.

Julie said...

I guess I'm not a nice person either, but did you really expect us to be???

I love your poem Eve! Really, I do. I'm glad your mom made you post it. She did that for a good reason, I see. :-)

boo said...

yeah I totally ignored the warning. that was pretty much like an invite to read, Eve, no offence. Awesome poem :-) I'm going to show it off to my roomies... ("yeah... my niece is pretty muc aweseome...") :-) love ya!

Me and Them said...

I was moved by your poem! In fact I could feel the urgency and weariness of the traveler. Fabulous job!
I don't want you to think I am not a nice person, I figured if your mom wanted you to post this poem, it was probably good. I was right!
--Sonja :D
(an other homeschool mom)

Sylvia said...

Eve, that was great. Although it made me tired. That's not hard to do right now.

athena said...

haha, this is certainly one way of learning how to double check one's work load. love the little lesson here.